why stop at the Black Lake? They had six months left, and Britain had other, larger bodies of water to stopper.
*snort* great start. so very sirius.
...but the first moment i knew i'd love this story for sure was this gem:
"The cold causes shrinkage, you imbecile," Snape asserted. "Though, I've heard it's difficult to tell with you, Pettigrew. If I were your cock, I wouldn't show my face either."
followed by...
Sirius couldn't help but grin at that. One didn't have to like their enemies to respect them.
i mean, anything that highlights snape's wit and snark to a full degree is already pretty great. but sirius's grudging appreciation makes it brilliant.
but i have to tell you, i loved how snape kept his cool throughout it all, as well as his intellect -- perfectly justified in his low opinion of his tormentors. (i mean... i really like james and sirius, don't get me wrong. even peter's not as bad as all that. but at times, i can relate to snape's condescending view of them.) the way he plays it off like he's bored, even willing to help just to speed things along -- it's a beautiful thing.
and then, of course, there's:
"Pusillanimous git," James teased. "C'mon, I dare you."
Sirius blinked -- at both the word and the dare.
"It means cowardly, Black. And someone," Snape said, turning The Nose up at Potter, "should back away from the dictionary."
*shakes head* ...for a moment, there, i wasn't sure i liked seeing that word in james's dialogue. but, oh man-- do the reaction ever make it worth it.
i think i've always had an appreciation for the way you write dialogue. and i agree with perverse_idyll: your snape voice it absolutely flawless. good lord, the sarcasm... the utter contempt... i could just inhale it. so perfectly, deliciously in character.
or this:
"Cor," James snorted, poking Snape's cock with the tip of his wand. "Stays crunchy, even in milk."
*snert* your james is such an ass. i love it. and (even if it's not quite the same level of delight as well-characterized snape) his voice -- as well as the others -- i can hear just as perfectly.
The Triple Grim Dare? James had gone straight for the throat and with a slight breach in etiquette, skipping right past the Double Grim Dare.
oh man... i could kiss you for that. the perfect mirroring of a Christmas story's narrative here is rather great. and totally cracked me up.
i meant to mention this somewhere in the review: that movie has always been one of my all-time favorites. and i think much of the irony and irreverence that makes me love it is captured wonderfully by this story. as much as i adore pop culture references in general -- your perverse, cracktastic twist on this particular bit of american nostalgia makes the fic a rare bit of brilliant.
...and finally, the ending. oh, the ending. with so little of remus in the rest of the fic, his appearance and commentary at the end really makes the story, for me. it's funny, it's in-character, and it ties the beginning and the end together beautifully.
i do have one little bit of con-crit: did you mean to say "absolute zero"? or maybe you were thinking of 0 celsius? i can't quite recall if this is a reference to something in the movie, and if it is, then i understand why you'd use it -- so just ignore me. or, *shrug* maybe james doesn't know what the term means. but if he does know... considering absolute zero is actually nearly -460° fahrenheit, it seems like a heck of an exaggeration.
at any rate... like i said, if you did mean to put that (for whichever reason), then please feel free to ignore me.
anyway, i hope i didn't ramble on too much. *facepalm*
i really did absolutely greatly enjoy the story, though. and let me just end on saying it will definitely be added to my memories.
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*snort* great start. so very sirius.
...but the first moment i knew i'd love this story for sure was this gem:
"The cold causes shrinkage, you imbecile," Snape asserted. "Though, I've heard it's difficult to tell with you, Pettigrew. If I were your cock, I wouldn't show my face either."
followed by...
Sirius couldn't help but grin at that. One didn't have to like their enemies to respect them.
i mean, anything that highlights snape's wit and snark to a full degree is already pretty great. but sirius's grudging appreciation makes it brilliant.
but i have to tell you, i loved how snape kept his cool throughout it all, as well as his intellect -- perfectly justified in his low opinion of his tormentors. (i mean... i really like james and sirius, don't get me wrong. even peter's not as bad as all that. but at times, i can relate to snape's condescending view of them.) the way he plays it off like he's bored, even willing to help just to speed things along -- it's a beautiful thing.
and then, of course, there's:
"Pusillanimous git," James teased. "C'mon, I dare you."
Sirius blinked -- at both the word and the dare.
"It means cowardly, Black. And someone," Snape said, turning The Nose up at Potter, "should back away from the dictionary."
*shakes head* ...for a moment, there, i wasn't sure i liked seeing that word in james's dialogue. but, oh man-- do the reaction ever make it worth it.
i think i've always had an appreciation for the way you write dialogue. and i agree with
or this:
"Cor," James snorted, poking Snape's cock with the tip of his wand. "Stays crunchy, even in milk."
*snert* your james is such an ass. i love it. and (even if it's not quite the same level of delight as well-characterized snape) his voice -- as well as the others -- i can hear just as perfectly.
The Triple Grim Dare? James had gone straight for the throat and with a slight breach in etiquette, skipping right past the Double Grim Dare.
oh man... i could kiss you for that. the perfect mirroring of a Christmas story's narrative here is rather great. and totally cracked me up.
i meant to mention this somewhere in the review: that movie has always been one of my all-time favorites. and i think much of the irony and irreverence that makes me love it is captured wonderfully by this story. as much as i adore pop culture references in general -- your perverse, cracktastic twist on this particular bit of american nostalgia makes the fic a rare bit of brilliant.
...and finally, the ending. oh, the ending. with so little of remus in the rest of the fic, his appearance and commentary at the end really makes the story, for me. it's funny, it's in-character, and it ties the beginning and the end together beautifully.
i do have one little bit of con-crit: did you mean to say "absolute zero"? or maybe you were thinking of 0 celsius? i can't quite recall if this is a reference to something in the movie, and if it is, then i understand why you'd use it -- so just ignore me. or, *shrug* maybe james doesn't know what the term means. but if he does know... considering absolute zero is actually nearly -460° fahrenheit, it seems like a heck of an exaggeration.
at any rate... like i said, if you did mean to put that (for whichever reason), then please feel free to ignore me.
anyway, i hope i didn't ramble on too much. *facepalm*
i really did absolutely greatly enjoy the story, though. and let me just end on saying it will definitely be added to my memories.