Um, without going to check in detail (about to leave for work), it was things like Harry wanting to keep his glasses on to see Snape, and that you didn't just mention taking the glasses off, but actually described him seeing Snape's hand as a blur etc - it was only tiny but it was something that caught my attention as nicely done for some reason. Seemed to fit with experience rather than being a 'let's take Harry's glasses out of the picture here somewhere...' Does that make more sense?
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Date: 2004-05-27 12:36 am (UTC)