Well, sorry about that. It looks like most beta comments have been erased since I saved the page. This one is still there in part 4 :

I know the run-on highlights the rush of Merlin's thoughts, and I like it. But I still think you need to break it up to make it more clear and to highlight the sudden shift that Merlin's re-entry into the piece is.

The missing words are still missing though.

And it takes a damn good story to make me want to carry on despite them.